Lost in you, the silent night,
where there is peace and seclusion,
where just my heartbeats are audible,
where remembrance of your love is antidote for distress.
I’m loving you, in silence.
Lost in you, dreamy eyes,
where forever our soul entwine,
where we promise to love evermore,
where you are the reason for my existence.
I am loving you, in dreams.
Lost in you, the fragrant quilt,
where I feel your terraces,
where you twine a wisp of my hair,
where our souls couple.
I am loving you, in fancy.
Lost in you, eloquent words,
where you obliquely call me beautiful,
where I throb in happiness,
where you portray our unceasing love.
I am loving you, in poems.
Lost in you, serendipitous ditty,
where broken lyrics string with flair,
where unmusical voice gives pleasure sensations,
where stars are more soothing than the moon.
I am loving you, in songs.
Lost in you, the perfect drizzle,
where we sense each other’s texture,
where the clean water taper the friction,
where the music is pitter-patter of raindrops.
I am loving you, in rains.
Lost in you, the unembellished window,
where I feel the warmth of your eyelids,
where sunbeam makes you shimmer artistically ,
where the glass captures the real adoration.
I am loving you in lights and shadows.
Lost in you, the wondrous painting,
where my name forms the colours,
where a single word completes the picture,
where the thick ink fails to clog the outline.
I am loving you, in delineation.
Let me remain lost in you,
let me keep loving you;
for your love is heavenly!
-Kritika Vashist
(Feb, 2014)
(So, Arpita, a fellow blogger who nominated me for Libester Award asked me about my favorite post/poem, and I had realized that I haven’t share it with all of you. This is the poem I had written last year and is my favorite for some unknown reason. I just like it the way it is. )
Many poems immediately evoke in me a response that might question a line, or a particular phrasing. It is never intended as a personal affront, but simply my analytical side doing its thing and bringing certain aspects into question.
Having read “Lost in You”, I can only say do not change anything. It is quite beautifully presented. If you have any doubts about your writing ability, just read this poem once again. Of course some of your work will present better than others, but never doubt that you do have an ability to capture the emotions of a moment, and present it such that the feelings can be shared. Great job. I loved it.
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Knowing that, Colin, I believe that this is a heartfelt compliment from you. I am so very glad to know that you loved it. Yes, often it happens with me that I tend to think of some of my works as quite ordinary and boring. However, I know that each step at a time, patiently will definitely improve me.
When I shared this with few of my friends, some appreciated it a lot and some said that the flow wasn’t right or something, that I now don’t remember clearly. I believe that few poetry are not meant to deal with flow or vocabulary. They just come out the way they are supposed to.
Thanks you so very much, Colin. I appreciate your significant comment 🙂
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It was moving! Changed my state of mind after one read! The sensation of hearing the heartbeat, the sight of dreamy eyes, the romance of twining hair, poems, songs, the perfect drizzle – this had all the ingredients of love in perfect proportions which re-emphasizes my belief that you are best when it comes to romantic poetry 🙂
Stars being more soothing than the moon, the unmusical voices bring the sensual but serene delight. The one name that completes the picture, I am in love with this 😀 Beautiful as ever 🙂
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Oh, after reading your comment, I realized that I actually did mention almost every moment. I am glad to know.
Your comment, as always, makes it beautiful! Thank you so much, Prateek. 🙂
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This is really nice, and specialy “I am loving you, in ………. ” every line.
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Thanks so much 🙂
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Delusional obsession. It’s title should have been like Lost and Delirious. Totally not criticising your work. It’s beautiful, as usual.
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I know, sweetheart. However, I wouldn’t say that it is delirious. Such moments do happen, but we often fail to realize their value and significance. The poem, depicts the significance of each moment between two lovers, from a normal dusty window to raindrops, from twining a wisp of hair to making love.
Thank you. ❤
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Stay lost because then only you will be found 🙂 found by the right guy at the right moment for all the things to fall in the right places 🙂 I like you and ur writing Kritika aka Phoebe 😀 you got it in you 🙂
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You said it, Darshith! Thank you. 🙂
So, I am Phoebe for you now?
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Of course you’re the one & only Phoebe Buffay for me 😀 Welcome Kritika 😉
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Fantastic, Kritika. So beautiful.
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Thank you, Annie ❤
By the way, you have a great name for knock knock jokes.
"Knock knock"
"Who's this?"
"Annie"
"Annie who?"
"Annie body in there?"
Sorry. I just thought of it!
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LOL!!!! That’s great.
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*wow!* I am more than glad I asked you that question otherwise I and your other blogger friends would have missed yet another beautiful piece of your work! It’s love in all together a different way, I just loved it and you’re an amazing writer Kritika! 🙂
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I am glad to know that, Archita. Thank you so much, sweetheart 🙂
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You’re most welcome dear 🙂
Take care!
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You too 🙂
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This is brilliant, so vivid.
Love
B
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Thank you, love! ❤
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Kritika…you are an amazing poet. You made me long for a love like this…..
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Your appreciation means a lot to me. Thank you.
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I am just in love with your writing like it’s increments in gazillion! !
Lost in you for sure!!! Love !! 😍😍😚
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I love you, Izza ❤
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😍😍😍😍😚
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Wow…I am really glad you decided to bring this out and post it here. Lost in you is a wonderful feeling and you capture it so well. Cheers =)
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I am glad you liked it. Thank you for your kind words, Chris. Cheers! 🙂
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‘Where the glass captures the real adoration’-wow what can i say beautiful 🙂
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Thank you 🙂
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This phenomenal kritika. Its waoh! ❤
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Aw shucks! Thank you, Ayushi ❤
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🙂
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Fantastic:)
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Thank you, Upen! 🙂
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I am simply lost in the flow. Let me remain lost in your this beautiful poetry its really feels heavenly. Waaaaaaooohh ❤ 🙂
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Thank you, Sulagno. You always encourage me 🙂
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Beautifully written and so heartfelt. No wonder it is your favourite. 🙂
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Thank you so much 🙂
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WOW!
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Don’t ya like sleep, man?
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I sleep when my mind quiets enough to allow slumber below the roar, angel! 😉
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I slept for the whole day today. I had drained out all from my mind before sleeping.
I hope it does on time. You eyes might need sleep, if not mind.
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I sometimes sleep for a few hours at a time, and sometimes for twelve or more at a stretch!
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Same story here. However, you should take proper sleep and rest.
There is something I learned some time back.
Whenever you cannot clear your mind, or when there is too much tension and worry. Whirl your hand around your head, make a fist (which is now containing all your worries) , now throw that shit with a quick abrupt motion on the ground. Now tension, worries, restlessness, everything has left your mind and is on the ground.
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And now we teach the martial arts?
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I got no problem with that!
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I will soon post a photo so that you can speak to me, instead of an avatar.
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I don’t think it matters much, but yes, okay! 😀
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You will really think it does not matter much when you see it! 😉
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I think I already know.
Spectacles, light stubble, mustache, a hat on the head, loose check shirt, and an awkwardly weird smile.
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I thought I saw someone peeping in my windows! My smile is unique! lol
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Angles don’t need to peep!
Haha! I think it is.
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Oh yeah! I must have forgotten the force I am dealing with! [shudder]
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The force won’t make you shudder. The force is light and soothing.
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And so we find ourselves at an impasse said the spider to the fly! somehow that reminds me of I ditty I read long ago. A flea and a fly in a flue, were trapped so what could they do? Said the fly let us flee, said the flea let us fly, So they flew thru a flaw in the flue! Pure corn, huh? Nap time angel. 😉
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Sorry, for replying late, I went to prepare dinner.
But flea cannot fly. Nonetheless, I liked reading it. Yes, pure corn it is!
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the flea rode the fly! What’s for dinner?
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Oh!
You didn’t go to bed?
Chapati and Dal, if you know what they are!
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Beans and bread? I eat them all the time! 😉
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Wheat and pulses.
I don’t like beans, though
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I looked up the recipes! So your dish is made like a gruel?
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Chapati made from dough.
Dal is a thick stew prepared from the pulses.
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Send me one?
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Haha! Can I pull those white-pink cheeks?
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Tan this time of year,young lady! Sure! 😉
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I read and replied to the email.
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That was truly an amazing composition, Kritika. Like a book that can’t be put down, I read each line, hoping for another and another line. Exquisite!
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I am humbled. Thank you so much, Rob! 🙂
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Truly a marvel, this is great work 🙂
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Thank you so much 🙂
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