The pillars have started to ache
The roots have almost dried up
All old leaves have fallen
The new ones do not come;
And I must tell you now
I stand here amid gloomy clouds
Like an old abandoned house.
I stand here longing for you
But you do not look through
The dusted windowpane
But you do not try to
Dust down the webs of sorrow.
I stand here with my eyes fixed
On the cracked and fragile door
Rain arrives, wind permeates;
The one I wait for do not come.
When the silence howls
In the blues of the night
I veil myself in the moonlight;
And I must tell you now
That if the shadows of despair
Grew larger to eclipse the moon
Each wall would break down
Leaving behind the darkest ruins
All that would echo your name
To kindle the fire of love and pain.
– Kritika Vashist
Full of the fiery power of love.
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You think so? I don’t know what was I thinking. I penned down whatever that came to my mind. Thank you, Erika!
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The best think you can do. That way your full energy flows into your words…. not thinking just feeling… What a power!!!
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Yes, indeed.
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🙂
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Strong words. Each line reflects depth of thought and it echoes optimism
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Thanks so much, Suchetana 🙂
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“All that would echo your name
To kindle the fire of love and pain.”
These lines! I’m speechless!
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Aw-shucks, Gaurav. Thank you so much.
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You’re welcome, Kritika! 😀
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WOW! Powerful, love.
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Thanks so much, Annie ❤
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I agree with the others that this is very powerful…amazing for stream of thought writing…Cheers =)
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Aw, thank you very much, Chris 🙂 I’m smiling.
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You never let your readers down(Y).
Cheers!!
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That means a lot, Upen. Thanks so much for encouragement 🙂
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Wish you get published:)
Cheers!!
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Aw shucks, Upen. You are too generous to say that. Thank you for your wishes, though. I’m smiling.
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Give it a serious thought Kritika:)
All the best.
Cheers!!
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Thank you again for encouragement , Upen ❤
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This is so beautiful. :’)
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I’m glad you think so! Thank you very much 🙂
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Wow….brilliant!
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Thanks so much, Pankaj 🙂
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Yet another beautiful piece of work. 🙂 Great going. 🙂
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Thanks a ton, Jarvis. 🙂
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Strong words and stronger feelings attached 😉 love this 🙂
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Glad to know that. Thank you, Darshith 🙂
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Wonderful , and as you told me once, the feeling follows through when one is not thinking! 😀
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It happens a lot, right?
It might also be because there was darkness outside and inside while I was typing 😀
Thank you, my hero!
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Spell binding as always
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If you say so. Thanks, love!
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I can say a million times 🙂
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❤ Izza!
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i love all your poems @Kritika for the intensity they have in them, and so is this one!
profound! 🙂
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Oh, my! Thanks so much, Daisy. I’m glad you liked them 🙂
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But you do not try to
Dust down the webs of sorrow.
All that would echo your name
To kindle the fire of love and pain.
These lines are so deep… You made me nostalgic K 🙂
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Thank you so much, love! 🙂
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❤ ❤ ❤
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wonderful construction… it has a controlled intensity… the last line in the third stanza ”The one I wait for do not come” might need tweaking, either – ‘do’ to ‘does’/ ‘one’ to ‘ones’ – I think 🙂
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Hey! Thanks a lot, Heath for mentioning that. I was quite confused with that line, I know I changed it a couple of times. Yes, now that you have also mentioned, I think it should be does. Thank you very much. Please keep correcting 😀
And hey! Thank you for your kind words 🙂
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Hi Kritika…Beautiful verses—no need to change a word…You are a Creative Spirit! Thanks for sharing your posts with all of us…Wishing you days of Gentle winds—Soft curves and Wonder…Phil
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Hello, Philip. Thank you for such a wonderful comment and for your kind words.
You bring positive vibes. Thank you. Have a good day.
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Have i told you, I LOVE your poems! Amazing how you come up with them!
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Oh, my! Thank you very much, Alok. It means a lot. I’m smiling 🙂
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You’ve earned it!
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Aw shucks! Thanks again.
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You seem to have your finger on the pulse of what’s really important Thanks for stopping by my blog as I wouldn’t have seen your work.
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Thank you very much for your kind words, Michael. I am glad that we met here on WordPress.
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This is beautiful! Ecstatic dear! ^_^ Last four lines are powerful ^_^
Kritika! I have nominated you for the Dragon’s Loyalty Award. Congo! Check it out: https://ultimatesolace.wordpress.com/2015/07/21/dragons-loyalty-award/
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Oh, my! Thank you thank you 😀
I’ll acknowledge it. Thanks again, Shambhavi 🙂
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^_^
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Brilliant dear Kritika! You are always so inspired! Thanks!
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That’s very generous of you to say that. Thank you very much, Hector. 🙂
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Beautiful piece
Powerful images
Thank you for your like
As always Sheldon
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Perhaps time to move on to the new morning sun.
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Yes, sir. Already did. 😀 Thank you for reading.
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