In the wildness of the night,
when the stars were veiled
by the silvery grey clouds,
and the moon had ruled the roost.
I hark back to your soulfully intoxicated
love that reigned over me,
in the wildness of the night.
The space around burned in passion.
The heaven had came down,
entered a life groaning in pleasure,
while the scorpion of love
bit me all over in leisure.
The steady movement of the scorpion,
carpeted all of me,
injected me with love poison, overwhelmingly.
Deeply immersed in the intoxication,
My body tripped in ecstasy.
Like the venomous grey clouds of the night,
insaneness enveloped my bones and skin.
The peerless moonlight in the dark,
authoritative of the wildness,
shed a soft glow,
while the scorpion of love
warmed the skin slowly and slowly.
I hark back to your irresistible scent.
The heavy breath,
while your skin chafed mine.
The intense dance of insanity around.
The alluring scorpion bites,
which numbed me, euphorically.
Breathing the contentment,
feeling your love all over me,
I had wish to die,
drowning in your intoxicated love,
in the wildness of the night.
– Kritika Vashist
Wow, so passionate and lovely, nice job! love as it should be 🙂
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Thank you, ma’am. 🙂
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Wow…That captures the passion of love so well. Great work! Cheers.
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I tried. Thank you! 🙂
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I haven’t sufficient words I don’t think! Just beautiful! Visual, emotional, sensual…left me breathless. Wow.
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The first sensual poem I tried to write. Thank you so much!
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The temperature on this one was high xD
Much Love
B
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Hehe! First attempt 😀 Thank you!
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You’re doing it right :p
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Lol! 😛
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Very nice Kritika! I like how you use the metaphors of venom and intoxication to show the strong effect of passion. The scene is set in this intoxication and wildness while the feelings of euphoria and contentment flow. The graphic you used goes well with the poem and helps set the mood and scene. Very artistic rendition.
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This was my first attempt to write a sensual poem metaphorically. I hope I could relate scorpion with love well in this poem.
Thank you for your significant comment and appreciation.
Take care.
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Thank You, Kritika! I believe that love, passion, and sensuality lend themselves very well to all of the methods of written language. The written language is the enduring expression of our humanity and to express our most desired emotion in this way is like an everlasting Spring season in our lives. You capture that well and if it interests you to do it, then you will only get better as you continue to explore and write on the subject. You are very talented and you do it well.
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I second you.
We’ll get better as we continue, and this is what that never stops me from writing every day.
Words find a way and then we find a life.
Thanks, Randstein. You are too kind.
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This can qualify for erotica. Very well done, not many people write about passionate things so passionately 😀
Peace 🙂
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Hehe. Believe me, I never thought I can ever write such a poem. But then had this scorpion thing on my mind and I just started writing, and when I put the pen down, I realised that I have actually written a sensual poem.
Thank you Anoop, for reading 🙂
See you!
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Kritika kritika! That was to much of a passion and toxic! 🙂
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Izza, Thanks! ❤
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Waaaooohh!! awesome and erotic, flooded with an intoxicating feeling of passion and pleasure ❤ incredible ❤
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I tried. Thank you for your appreciative words. I am glad you liked it so much! ❤
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yeah you tried well and i fell in love with it. Ohh mind blowing. Your best works which i have seen so far. Really i feel if you say this 1 which was your 1st attempt then how beautiful you will be when you write few more. Please i will wait for those ok. I hope they will be more lovely. ❤ Lots and love and hugs to you 🙂
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Hehe. Yes, I will write more. Thank you again ❤
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you are sweet…….really 🙂
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😀
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Woah! The metophors with which you worded the passion were magical. The aura of love you created shouts out throughout the poem about the passion with which it has been written. Brilliant piece of work!
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You have made my day, and you know that already! ❤
I tried to create that passion. This is my first attempt at writing a sensual poetry. I am so glad that you liked it.
Thank you so much, Prateek. You make me smile 🙂
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I am glad I was able to do that, Kritika 🙂 But I mean it, after reading it I wondered that whether I can write this beautifully and a clear ‘no’ was heard from within 😀
And I really salute you if you created this in your first attempt! Your second one, ‘Clavicles’ too was able to create the same magic 🙂
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Too much romanticism on the blog 😛
Thank you, again! You are too kind. 🙂
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Mummy kasam ! 😀
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Hahaha! Please, don’t judge me. I am a wonderful soul, you just said! 😀
Plus, a punjabi by heart minus chicken and whisky 😛
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Oh ! I am not alone, you too are a wonderful disgrace :’)
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I proudly take that tag! ^_^
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I too! And we write as well, I suppose we are high on life 😀
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Well, I never doubted that for myself. I am high on life most of the times 😛
Being high is awesome, anyway! 😀
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Haha you know what, you are way cooler than a wonderful soul. I’ll think of a more apt adjective when your next post comes up 😉
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Kohli, clean bowled me, huh? 😀
Because I don’t know what to reply to this.
You already use such appreciative words, you know that.
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Well you thanked a Kohli for ‘appreciative’ words. I think this a much bigger appreciation for me 😉
But on a serious note, I had this image of creative people, especially writers and musicians that its hard to find them sober. A point of confession here – I started this blog when I smoked for the first (and last) time. So it is really a great relief for me to realize that the perception was wrong 🙂
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Your perception about being sober is different. Nobody is sober. Drinks, smoke doesn’t make you high and not having them doesn’t make you sober. I am high without both. Writers are high with words and creativeness within.
You are presently high on life. Soberness is a bitch! Get high on words and yes, coffee 😉
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Ah I learnt so much today! And yes, coffee! But it has to be perfect 😉
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Haha. Always 😀
I shall sleep now. Goodnight! See you soon. 🙂
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A beautiful night to you too. Take care 🙂
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Wow that was intense. Marvellous word, well done. 🙂
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Thanks so much, Abhishek 🙂
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Welcome: -)
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In the wilderness of the night…
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Hi Kritika. I have only loved in my dreams. Thank you for liking my poem The Peninsula! Peace and Best Wishes. The Foureyed Poet.
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Hi Kritika. I have but dreamed of love. Thank you so much for liking my poem The Peninsula! Peace and Best Wishes. The Foureyed Poet.
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I really liked it. 🙂
Have a good day, sir!
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